College essay second draft

Write an essay describing a person or event that had a significant impact in defining your scholarly, professional and personal goals. Your essay should also describe what part the Honors College plays in achieving these goal

     Summer vacation has just finished and it was the first day of school and my first day of being a sophomore. I remember praying to God before arriving at school and asking him that i would have a good school year and that i would do better than freshman year. I also asked him if i could make it in the basketball team this year. After that prayer i was reminded of my mom telling me that she knows i would've done better if i wasn't lazy. So when i arrived at school i was happy to see my friends again and my teachers. That year i was taking Geometry, Language Arts 2, Broadcast Media, Physical Education, Physics, and U.S History. Looking at my schedule I was excited that the courses i wanted was there and that i was taking "easy classes" except broadcast since it was very new to me and i knew it would take time for me to get the hang of it.
     The first month of school has gone by and my parents would always check on my grades and remind me whats due for each week.When she logged in, she was very surprised. Guessing from her facial expression i thought she was very surprised in a good way and that she was proud of me. But when she made me look at my grades, I too was very surprised. I really thought I was doing well in school and that i would have nothing to worry about for this year. But it was my tests that killed my grades and my mom was really upset.
      My mom grounded me and took away my iPod touch and my privilege to play basketball with my friends every last day of school of each week. I begged her though to let me play basketball with my friends every friday after school. But my mom reminded me if I was on the basketball team, do you really think that they would let you play the games with those kind of grades? I was really upset that day and luckily she really made me think about that question. Both my parents wanted me to do better, so they made me stay grounded until i get my grades back up. From that day on i took my classes more seriously and made sure that i wouldn't forget to study for my tests and of course do my homework.
       Homework and tests really hurt my grades in the beginning of my high school years. Although i never had a D or an F i was still struggling to keep up with deadlines. I finally learned why they would always get mad at me for making careless mistakes or having missing assignments when it comes to school. Its all because they want me to go to a good college and that i would have a good future. I also learned that the actions or lifestyles i made then could stay with me when i go out in this world. Thats why little by little im trying to act more mature and adult like so i would be able handle life without my parents constantly reminding me what to do
     This event really changed my goals on being a basketball player. My goal back then was to be on the basketball team and to also do well in my studies so that i wouldn't let down my parents any longer. From what my mom kept telling on the end of my freshman year really impacted me on how i looked in my classes. I used to always think that my classes were going to be very easy but now i would always think that they are going to be a challenge but all i have to do is to put effort into everything i do.

Describing the Picture

1.The woman was hesitating to pull the trigger. Staring into her lovers eyes, all she could see was guilt. Her

eyes filled with tears she knew she couldn't shoot him. As she was about to pull the trigger, her lover begged 

for mercy. She became dogmatic. She closed her eyes and allowed the gun speak for herself.

2. It was a ordinary day. We had our daily volleyball practices. While the radio was playing, the DJ went to 

commercial. "50% off all sports bra's and spandex's for women". This was a joyous day.

3.I have been waiting for this moment. I have been waiting for months in fact. I remember that day when my 

dad left to serve the country and to protect it. I also remember praying to God everyday just to ask for 

protection over him and that he would come back safe. Many months later, there he was. Coming out of the 

giant plane looking for us. As soon i saw him me and my siblings ran to him. With his arms open wide, we 

hugged him.

Ranyl Panarigan

It was 6 am in the morning and my dad woke me up. He made my breakfast and wanted me to hurry up. I was too lazy to get up and so i chose to stay in bed and not listen to him. Then 10 minutes later i see my dad with water in his hands just sprinkling it all over my face. But i still wouldn't listen to him and tried to go back to sleep. This time my dad dragged me off the bed and carried me to the table and tried to make me eat my breakfast. I was very angry with him that morning because it was too early in the morning for me and i was so tired. Trying to keep my head up i used my arm as a stand for my head to rest on. Feeling annoyed by my dad taking a picture i was silent and decided to not eat the cereal he made.  

Kainoa Mattos

It was our annuel "adventure night". My friends and I go wondering into random places and have a

adventure. As we were going down this suspicious rode. As we went followed this rode, we came upon 

what seemed to be abandoned house. While walking into the house we noticed that the walls turned into a 

green like texture. The suddenly the door slammed shut. Startled, I started screaming, then a voice said 

"Silence! you are trespassing on the holy ones ground" Then it appeared.. A sloth. This sloth wasn't a 

ordinary sloth, it had a lustrous gold with a majestic wond. It then said "Ring-ding-ding-ding-dingeringeding" 

Everyone blacked out... We woke up wobbled and woozy. We were all sloths

College Essay Prompt #3 Draft

     It was the end of freshman year and i was able to finish the school year with a 3.2 GPA. I was really proud of myself that I was able to pass the school year with a GPA of 3.0 and above. My parents were also very proud of me but kept on telling me that i could've done better. "If only you weren't lazy and stopped procrastinating you would at least have gotten a 3.8 or even a 4.0", my Mom said. That being said i was also very disappointed in myself because i knew if i didn't give in to video games and other things that would distract me i would at least gotten better grades.
     Summer vacation has just finished and it was the first day of school and my first day of being a sophomore. I remember praying to God before arriving at school and asking him that i would have a good school year and that i would do better than freshman year. I also asked him if i could make it in the basketball team this year. After that prayer i was reminded of my mom telling me that she knows i would've done better if i wasn't lazy. So when i arrived at school i was happy to see my friends again and my teachers. That year i was taking Geometry, Language Arts 2, Broadcast Media, Physical Education, Physics, and U.S History. Looking at my schedule I was excited that the courses i wanted was there and that i was taking "easy classes" except broadcast since it was very new to me and i knew it would take time for me to get the hang of it.
     The first month of school has gone by and my parents would always check on my grades and remind me whats due for each week. As she was logging into the online gradebook I wasn't too worried because i was confident that i have done well so far and i was really looking forward to compliments coming out of my mom's mouth. When she logged in, she was very surprised. Guessing from her facial expression i thought she was very surprised in a good way and that she was proud of me. But when she made me look at my grades, I too was very surprised. I really thought I was doing well in school and that i would have nothing to worry about for this year. But it was my tests that killed my grades and my mom was really upset.
      My mom grounded me and took away my iPod touch and my privilege to play basketball with my friends every last day of school of each week. I begged her though to let me play basketball with my friends every friday after school. But my mom reminded me if I was on the basketball team, do you really think that they would let you play the games with those kind of grades? I was really upset that day and luckily she really made me think about that question. Both my parents knows that i can do better, so they made me stay grounded until i get my grades back up. From that day on i took my classes more seriously and made sure that i wouldn't forget to study for my tests and of course do my homework. This is the event that really helped me in my next two years of high school.
     This event really changed my goals on being a basketball player. My goal back then was to be on the basketball team and to also do well in my studies so that i wouldn't let down my parents any longer. From what my mom kept telling on the end of my freshman year really impacted me on how i looked in my classes. I used to always think that my classes were going to be very easy but now i would always think that they are going to be a challenge but all i have to do is to put effort into everything i do.

College Essay Prompts

UNIVERSITY OF HAWAII (WEST OAHU)
Tell us about yourself and explain why you have chosen UH West O`ahu for your academic studies.

YALE UNIVERSITY
Please reflect on something you would like us to know about you that we might not learn from the rest of your application, or on something about which you would like to say more. You may write about anything—from personal experiences or interests to intellectual pursuits.

UNIVERSITY OF NEVADA, LAS VEGAS
Write an essay describing a person or event that had a significant impact in defining your scholarly, professional and personal goals. Your essay should also describe what part the Honors College plays in achieving these goals

Coming of Age Draft PHOTOSHOP

Essay Prompts

• UNIVERSITY OF HAWAII

1. Community or Volunteer Service—– Complete an essay describing what activities you participated in (i.e. any activities including volunteer, leadership, membership and community services in social, school or community organizations which demonstrate your willingness to give back or contribute to your community).
2. Commitment to Heath Care—Complete an essay describing what activities related to Health Care that you participated in (i.e. demonstrated commitment to health care, volunteer work, employment in health services, enrolled in a degree program in any area of health fields; career goals and plans in the health care field regardless of area of study; how you intend to impact the health of your community in the State of Hawai‘i.)
3. 442nd Veterans Endowed Scholarship—Complete an essay describing the role of the 442nd Regimental Combat Team of the United States Army in World War II and their legacy.

           UNIVERSITY OF GEORGIA

1. Choose an intellectual or creative opportunity (for example, community involvement, a summer program, a unique project, travel abroad, etc.) from your high school years that you have enjoyed and highlight how you have grown personally because of the experience.
2. UGA's First Year Odyssey Program offers more than 300 seminar courses for new freshmen.  Some examples include "The History of Horseracing", "Einstein and the Theories of Relativity" and "The Zombie Plague".   If you could create your own seminar course at UGA in any subject area that interests you, what would it be? What would the course be named and what would you hope to learn?
3. Tell us an interesting or amusing story about yourself that you have not already shared in your application.
4. Incredibly, you have just won a $100 million lottery.  To receive it, you must first earn a college degree.  How does this change your college experience?  How does it change your life after college?
        YALE UNIVERSITY
   In this second essay, please reflect on something you would like us to know about you that we might not learn from the rest of your application, or on something about which you would like to say more. You may write about anything—from personal experiences or interests to intellectual pursuits.

Coming of age FINAL

     Sports was one of the biggest obstacles in my life when i was a kid. It was a big struggle for me because it was like a new word for me and i didn't know what it was until i had P.E in 1st grade. Whenever our teacher made us play certain sports i would always be the one that would make my team lose. Me not knowing sports was the cause of many of my friends putting me down. From then on i was the kid that was always picked last whenever we had to pick teams in P.E or whenever we had recess. It took me until 4th grade to finally get the hang of things when it came to P.E. I was pretty decent at it and my P.E  teacher was really proud of how much i improved. After 4 years of not knowing what sports was and doing so many of them i chose my favorite sport which was basketball.

     Basketball then was my only focus and goal that i wanted to achieve in life. I would always practice everyday on that one sport trying to get my shots down, to be able to dribble on each hand, and to work on my weaknesses. When I was finally felt confident enough to use the techniques i learned, I begged my parents to put me in a basketball team or basketball camp. But my fear of getting picked on really interfered with my decision in being in any basketball team. It was until my parents forced me into going to a 3 day basketball camp that's held almost every summer by my church.I was still very scared and nervous until I met the coaches and they said that I would be alright and i should be fine. 
     Ever since the sign ups i have been practicing and practicing trying to make sure that i get better so i won't get picked as much. When it came to the first day of basketball camp i was already nervous. There were so many kids my age playing like the pros. I felt very intimidated and somehow reminded at what happen before as a kid. When it came to making teams for the next two days i was really nervous. I wanted to be in the championships and i wanted to win. 
     When they called my name they put me in with these players who was very eager to win. When our coach called for a team meeting I was very scared at what my coach was gonna do. Instead of making plays and doing all that "coach" work, we bonded. We talked about what struggles we had in life or why we wanted to come to this camp. From that team bonding i left the camp with a happy face and made a lot of new friends. On the next day, it was the playoffs where the coaches will see who goes to the championships. I was very excited and eager to play the games. On our first game our team did not really start as well in the first half. We couldn't pass the ball to well and our shots didn't go in. But when it was the second half of the game we were able to make a comeback and win the game. As the games went on our team was really doing well. We were able to make it to the championships! I was very proud of our team on how we were able to work together. But I was actually proud of myself because i was able to score a lot of the points and no one bothered to say a bad word to me. Instead my friends were very amazed and happy to have me on their team.
     It was the last day of camp and i was very sad. I wanted to get to know my teammates a little bit more and most of all i wanted to play the games more too. When i found out our division was up first i was very excited and ready to play. I was ready to finally show those friends that put me down and show them that i am no longer that person who was always junk at sports. So when it was time to play i was in the starting lineup. It was our possession and i was shooting guard. I got the ball and i was able to dribble past my defender and make layup. Me making that lay up made me confident throughout the game. It was the last quarter and we were down by 3. It was our possession and my teammate had the ball. For the last two possessions he was able to make layups which shrank their lead to 1. We only had 10 seconds left and i was getting really nervous.So my teammate had the ball and was really trying to make another layup. When i was open he passed it and it was already at 5 seconds. So i rushed to the three point line and shot it. The buzzer sounded and i made it! It was a day to remember for me. I was now free of these constant put downs that would always stop me from playing the sport i loved. I thanked God that day because he was the reason i made that shot. The good thing from my story was not the championship but the will and practice i had to get to where i am now. I finally learned how to step out of my box show people that i am a good player. Today, i still have some people that put me down all the time but because of that day i learned that if i just went out there and step out of my comfort zone, I know i can do it. That is my coming of age.