1.What piece of writing did you like best in my portfolio and why?
Your Convention & Presentation is what I like best because that is your final draft where every written thing has been corrected, edited or revised, & ready to be published.
2.What did you like about my portfolio and sharing and what would you like to see me improve on?
I liked Your Coming of Age Outcome of overcoming your fear being put down & insulted at how you play in sports. I would like to see you improve on your Sentence & Fluency, I believe there were words that needed to be changed or added that would make your writing more effective & beneficial to your Topic.
3.Which of the writing traits (ideas, organization, voice, word choice) do you feel was most successful for me? Your Word Choice was most successful because it suits to your character in your writings.
4.Which of the traits of writing would you like me to improve on in the coming semester? I would like You to improve on your Sentence & Fluency Traits in the coming semester. I believe You could do it by not slacking on your responsibilities in your academics in general.
Thursday, December 19, 2013
Monday, December 16, 2013
Thursday, December 5, 2013
Angry Letter Final Draft
3656 A Salt Lake Blvd
Honolulu, HI
96818
Dear YouTube,
Ever since I was little I have always enjoyed watching videos on your website. I have always enjoyed
watching what your site has to offer such as nigahiga. thedominicshow, wongfuproductions, etc.
These past 3 years I have been bombarded with ads that start before a video. Although you have a
skip button on some ads I feel there should be no ads at all to begin with. Also I have also noticed ads
popping up during the video as well and I think it takes away from enjoying a good video because we
are forced to close it. As I attempt to close it, I sometimes miss the "x" mark and end up going to the site and miss a part of the video. I thought YouTube was just a place for home producers to share the videos online and not a way for businesses to advertise their company or products. I feel they are useless and I find it rare for viewers to actually listen to the ad or pay attention to it and look for the skip button. I believe other youtubers like thedominicshow hate these ads as well. In his video ANNOYING ADS, he shows how annoying ads are and how he guesses correctly on what we are seeing before and during the video. He also makes a good point that these ads are useless and no one pays attention to it except the skip button.
I understand that having those ads are necessary to keep the website free of charge and to gain money
but I think have those ads on the right side is better than it popping up during the video or showing a
commercial before the video.
I hope you make the necessary adjustments for the site to be a better place for viewers to watch videos.
Sincerely,
Ranyl Panarigan
Honolulu, HI
96818
Dear YouTube,
Ever since I was little I have always enjoyed watching videos on your website. I have always enjoyed
watching what your site has to offer such as nigahiga. thedominicshow, wongfuproductions, etc.
These past 3 years I have been bombarded with ads that start before a video. Although you have a
skip button on some ads I feel there should be no ads at all to begin with. Also I have also noticed ads
popping up during the video as well and I think it takes away from enjoying a good video because we
are forced to close it. As I attempt to close it, I sometimes miss the "x" mark and end up going to the site and miss a part of the video. I thought YouTube was just a place for home producers to share the videos online and not a way for businesses to advertise their company or products. I feel they are useless and I find it rare for viewers to actually listen to the ad or pay attention to it and look for the skip button. I believe other youtubers like thedominicshow hate these ads as well. In his video ANNOYING ADS, he shows how annoying ads are and how he guesses correctly on what we are seeing before and during the video. He also makes a good point that these ads are useless and no one pays attention to it except the skip button.
I understand that having those ads are necessary to keep the website free of charge and to gain money
but I think have those ads on the right side is better than it popping up during the video or showing a
commercial before the video.
I hope you make the necessary adjustments for the site to be a better place for viewers to watch videos.
Sincerely,
Ranyl Panarigan
Saturday, November 30, 2013
Angry Letter Rough Draft
Dear Youtube,
Ever since i was little i have always enjoyed watching videos on your website. I have always enjoyed watching what your site has to offer such as channels like nigahiga, thedominicshow, wongfuproductions, etc.
But this past 3 years i have been bombarded with ads that starts before a video. Although you have a skip button on some ads i feel there should be no ads at all to begin with. Also i have also noticed ads popping up during the video as well and i think it takes away from enjoying a good video because we are forced to close it. But as i attempt to close it, i sometimes miss the "x" mark and end up going to the site and miss a part of the video. But I thought youtube was just a place for home producers to share the videos online and not a way for businesses to advertise their company or products. I feel they are useless and i find it rare for viewers to actually listen to the ad or pay attention to it and look for the skip button. I understand that having those ads are necessary to keep the website free of charge and to gain money but i think have those ads on the right side is better than it popping up during the video or showing a commercial before the video. I hope you make the necessary adjustments for the site to be a better place for viewers to watch videos.
Sincerely,
Ranyl Panarigan
Ever since i was little i have always enjoyed watching videos on your website. I have always enjoyed watching what your site has to offer such as channels like nigahiga, thedominicshow, wongfuproductions, etc.
But this past 3 years i have been bombarded with ads that starts before a video. Although you have a skip button on some ads i feel there should be no ads at all to begin with. Also i have also noticed ads popping up during the video as well and i think it takes away from enjoying a good video because we are forced to close it. But as i attempt to close it, i sometimes miss the "x" mark and end up going to the site and miss a part of the video. But I thought youtube was just a place for home producers to share the videos online and not a way for businesses to advertise their company or products. I feel they are useless and i find it rare for viewers to actually listen to the ad or pay attention to it and look for the skip button. I understand that having those ads are necessary to keep the website free of charge and to gain money but i think have those ads on the right side is better than it popping up during the video or showing a commercial before the video. I hope you make the necessary adjustments for the site to be a better place for viewers to watch videos.
Sincerely,
Ranyl Panarigan
Thursday, November 14, 2013
Risky Business Final
Teens today have been so focused on todays trends. Trends can keep teens up to date with everything that goes on in the world.Teen trends can affect many aspects in life in a bad way. It could damage these relationships depending on the trends they decide to follow.
Social networking has been the most dominant trend in teens today. Facebook, instagram, vine, are good ways for teens to communicate and express themselves. It often strengthens relationships with friends because its way simpler for teens to communicate instead of communicating personally. But there are many cons to social networking that breaks a relationship through cyber bullying. According to the National Crime Prevention Council about forty-percent of teens have been victims of cyber bullying.
Fashion trends are also another trend that is so important in teens today. Fashion industries have been pulling teens into thinking that these clothes define who you are. Nowadays teens now have created their own "cliques" or gangs. These cliques are oftenly made through what a person wears. These types of things also break any previous relationships you had before because teens would usually want to stay in their clique.
Although trends usually lasts very long, they will eventually die out. Once these trends die out most teens would do anything to try and keep up to date with whats trending. Being too trendy can break relationships because it could lose your focus on what needs to be done and what matters the most.
Teen trends can affect many aspects in life. These types of trends such as social networking, fashion type trends and trends in general are some of the things teens do. Although there are many positive effects of trends, there are also many negative effects of these trends and it could effect relationships in a bad way. But it all depends on what a teen chooses.
Social networking has been the most dominant trend in teens today. Facebook, instagram, vine, are good ways for teens to communicate and express themselves. It often strengthens relationships with friends because its way simpler for teens to communicate instead of communicating personally. But there are many cons to social networking that breaks a relationship through cyber bullying. According to the National Crime Prevention Council about forty-percent of teens have been victims of cyber bullying.
Fashion trends are also another trend that is so important in teens today. Fashion industries have been pulling teens into thinking that these clothes define who you are. Nowadays teens now have created their own "cliques" or gangs. These cliques are oftenly made through what a person wears. These types of things also break any previous relationships you had before because teens would usually want to stay in their clique.
Although trends usually lasts very long, they will eventually die out. Once these trends die out most teens would do anything to try and keep up to date with whats trending. Being too trendy can break relationships because it could lose your focus on what needs to be done and what matters the most.
Teen trends can affect many aspects in life. These types of trends such as social networking, fashion type trends and trends in general are some of the things teens do. Although there are many positive effects of trends, there are also many negative effects of these trends and it could effect relationships in a bad way. But it all depends on what a teen chooses.
Sunday, November 3, 2013
Risky Business TRENDS Draft
Teens today have been so focused on todays trends. Trends can keep teens up to date with everything that goes on in the world.Teen trends can affect many aspects in life in a bad way. It could damage these relationships depending on the trends they decide to follow.
There are many good and bad trends out there for teens to choose. But there are a lot of teens that choose to do the "bad" trend and it could break any relationship with that teen. A relationship could break because that friend/relative could have bad thoughts of that teen and have different perspective on that person's perspective. Basically a teen that choses a "bad" trend, some would look at that teen differently.
Although there are many "bad" trends there are also "good" trends as well. So trends could also affect relationships in good ways. It could help boost your reputation or make yourself look good. Trends could also build more relationships depending on what a teen chooses to do. Even though the teen chooses the "good" trends, it could also break relationships with certain friends/relatives if they have a different view on it and think its bad.
Teens that choose to put trends first could also affect relationships in a bad way. Teens that chooses to keep up to date to todays trends could end up doing that first over his/hers priorities. When the teen chooses trends over priorities could break the teens relationship.
Teen trends can affect many aspects in life. Trends affect relationships in many good and bad ways. It all depends on what the teen chooses and that teens decisions to whether or not break that relationship with that person.
There are many good and bad trends out there for teens to choose. But there are a lot of teens that choose to do the "bad" trend and it could break any relationship with that teen. A relationship could break because that friend/relative could have bad thoughts of that teen and have different perspective on that person's perspective. Basically a teen that choses a "bad" trend, some would look at that teen differently.
Although there are many "bad" trends there are also "good" trends as well. So trends could also affect relationships in good ways. It could help boost your reputation or make yourself look good. Trends could also build more relationships depending on what a teen chooses to do. Even though the teen chooses the "good" trends, it could also break relationships with certain friends/relatives if they have a different view on it and think its bad.
Teens that choose to put trends first could also affect relationships in a bad way. Teens that chooses to keep up to date to todays trends could end up doing that first over his/hers priorities. When the teen chooses trends over priorities could break the teens relationship.
Teen trends can affect many aspects in life. Trends affect relationships in many good and bad ways. It all depends on what the teen chooses and that teens decisions to whether or not break that relationship with that person.
Sunday, September 15, 2013
College essay second draft
Write an essay describing a person or event that had a significant impact in defining your scholarly, professional and personal goals. Your essay should also describe what part the Honors College plays in achieving these goal
Summer vacation has just finished and it was the first day of school and my first day of being a sophomore. I remember praying to God before arriving at school and asking him that i would have a good school year and that i would do better than freshman year. I also asked him if i could make it in the basketball team this year. After that prayer i was reminded of my mom telling me that she knows i would've done better if i wasn't lazy. So when i arrived at school i was happy to see my friends again and my teachers. That year i was taking Geometry, Language Arts 2, Broadcast Media, Physical Education, Physics, and U.S History. Looking at my schedule I was excited that the courses i wanted was there and that i was taking "easy classes" except broadcast since it was very new to me and i knew it would take time for me to get the hang of it.
The first month of school has gone by and my parents would always check on my grades and remind me whats due for each week.When she logged in, she was very surprised. Guessing from her facial expression i thought she was very surprised in a good way and that she was proud of me. But when she made me look at my grades, I too was very surprised. I really thought I was doing well in school and that i would have nothing to worry about for this year. But it was my tests that killed my grades and my mom was really upset.
My mom grounded me and took away my iPod touch and my privilege to play basketball with my friends every last day of school of each week. I begged her though to let me play basketball with my friends every friday after school. But my mom reminded me if I was on the basketball team, do you really think that they would let you play the games with those kind of grades? I was really upset that day and luckily she really made me think about that question. Both my parents wanted me to do better, so they made me stay grounded until i get my grades back up. From that day on i took my classes more seriously and made sure that i wouldn't forget to study for my tests and of course do my homework.
Homework and tests really hurt my grades in the beginning of my high school years. Although i never had a D or an F i was still struggling to keep up with deadlines. I finally learned why they would always get mad at me for making careless mistakes or having missing assignments when it comes to school. Its all because they want me to go to a good college and that i would have a good future. I also learned that the actions or lifestyles i made then could stay with me when i go out in this world. Thats why little by little im trying to act more mature and adult like so i would be able handle life without my parents constantly reminding me what to do
This event really changed my goals on being a basketball player. My goal back then was to be on the basketball team and to also do well in my studies so that i wouldn't let down my parents any longer. From what my mom kept telling on the end of my freshman year really impacted me on how i looked in my classes. I used to always think that my classes were going to be very easy but now i would always think that they are going to be a challenge but all i have to do is to put effort into everything i do.
Summer vacation has just finished and it was the first day of school and my first day of being a sophomore. I remember praying to God before arriving at school and asking him that i would have a good school year and that i would do better than freshman year. I also asked him if i could make it in the basketball team this year. After that prayer i was reminded of my mom telling me that she knows i would've done better if i wasn't lazy. So when i arrived at school i was happy to see my friends again and my teachers. That year i was taking Geometry, Language Arts 2, Broadcast Media, Physical Education, Physics, and U.S History. Looking at my schedule I was excited that the courses i wanted was there and that i was taking "easy classes" except broadcast since it was very new to me and i knew it would take time for me to get the hang of it.
The first month of school has gone by and my parents would always check on my grades and remind me whats due for each week.When she logged in, she was very surprised. Guessing from her facial expression i thought she was very surprised in a good way and that she was proud of me. But when she made me look at my grades, I too was very surprised. I really thought I was doing well in school and that i would have nothing to worry about for this year. But it was my tests that killed my grades and my mom was really upset.
My mom grounded me and took away my iPod touch and my privilege to play basketball with my friends every last day of school of each week. I begged her though to let me play basketball with my friends every friday after school. But my mom reminded me if I was on the basketball team, do you really think that they would let you play the games with those kind of grades? I was really upset that day and luckily she really made me think about that question. Both my parents wanted me to do better, so they made me stay grounded until i get my grades back up. From that day on i took my classes more seriously and made sure that i wouldn't forget to study for my tests and of course do my homework.
Homework and tests really hurt my grades in the beginning of my high school years. Although i never had a D or an F i was still struggling to keep up with deadlines. I finally learned why they would always get mad at me for making careless mistakes or having missing assignments when it comes to school. Its all because they want me to go to a good college and that i would have a good future. I also learned that the actions or lifestyles i made then could stay with me when i go out in this world. Thats why little by little im trying to act more mature and adult like so i would be able handle life without my parents constantly reminding me what to do
This event really changed my goals on being a basketball player. My goal back then was to be on the basketball team and to also do well in my studies so that i wouldn't let down my parents any longer. From what my mom kept telling on the end of my freshman year really impacted me on how i looked in my classes. I used to always think that my classes were going to be very easy but now i would always think that they are going to be a challenge but all i have to do is to put effort into everything i do.
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